Ty LeVarge
Mr. Salsich
English 02
June 4, 2009
Diversity Among People:
An Essay on How Two Characters are Related to a Poem
People are different in the world. There are different races, different personalities, different nationalities, and different languages. Not all people are the same. We learn to accept the differences of the people around us.
In the story, “Sonny’s Blues”, Sonny relates to the poem “Yes” in his own way. Sonny was a man who had no control over himself and was always in despair (FAST) through drugs. Sonny was a colored adult who had complications and could only relieve himself through music. He plays the piano like he was born to play. In the poem “Yes”, William Stafford talks of how sudden things can happen at any time. He talks about the disasters such as Armageddon and earthquakes. He talks of how it can happen at any time; during the day, at night, even right now. Sonny can be changed, like the environment when a disaster strikes. As soon as Sonny puts his fragile fingers on the keys of a piano, he changes inside his inner soul. He plays his problems on the piano and everyone can hear them and understand them. Overall, Sonny changes quickly and can let loose a tempest when he plays his piano.
Similar to Sonny, Dexter Green in Winter Dreams relates to a different poem named “The Real Work” by Wendell Berry. Dexter was just a young golfer who met a girl named Judy Jones, who he liked and became close with her. She later left him because she fell in love with another man. Dexter later wishes that he could have been more loving of her, so that they could have stayed as a couple. Similarly, Berry states in his poem that only the working people get the rewards of working hard. If someone’s mind is not filled with questions, then you are not performing at your minimum. The only people that are hard working people, are the ones that have swarms of questions in their thoughts. Dexter has many questions during his life that remain with him for many years without leaving his thoughts. Most of these thoughts are about Judy and why she left him. He is paralyzed by so many thoughts and ponders them for hours on end. Dexter is a complex character who has many difficulties in his life, but is able to calm himself.
People, fictional and real are all different. Everyone has their changing periods and change differently. Dexter and Sonny are similar in more ways than they are different. No person is the same as anyone else.
Thursday, June 4, 2009
Tristan's Exam
Tristan Yerkes
Mr. Salsich
English 02
4th June, 2009
The Last Trickle:
An Essay on Emotion and Art
The most emotional profession there is is art. Art requires pent-up emotion to be let out in a medium. The poem The Real Work by Wendell Berry conveys the same thoughts about art and emotion. Both Sonny from “Sonny's Blues” and the poet, Emily Dickinson relate to The Real Work.
TS: Sonny held in his own emotion, bottled it up, and let it out through his blues. SD: Sonny first held in his emotions, creating a dam of feelings ready to be let loose. CM: He held them back, using drugs, alcohol, and a reclusive attitude, as his brother said, “I suddenly had the feeling that I didn't know him at all.” CM: Sonny came to his “real journey” his “real work” when he had to funnel his emotions into song at the end of the story. SD: Sonny then let his emotions flow through and transform into the beautiful music he played. CM: At the end, he played this beautiful music, he was “the impeded stream, […] the one that sings.” CM: He used this emotional music to help his brother understand him and help Sonny understand himself. CS: This music was a real work of art, the physical embodiment of Sonny's emotion, what he once controlled, controlling him.
TS: Emily Dickinson also held in her emotions, in a less destructive way than Sonny. SD: Emily Dickinson, living in total isolation for most of her life, had no outlet for her emotions other than art. CM: Dickinson barely ever left her home and almost never had any visitors, which kept her from letting loose any emotion. CM: Berry says, “The mind that is not baffled is employed” which shows that since Dickinson was not baffled by other people, she was employed in writing her emotional poetry. SD: Dickinson's impeded stream trickled through to do the real work of poetry writing. CM: Because Dickinson's emotions were so strong and different, her writing was strong and different, containing random marks and capitalization for emphasis. CM: Dickinson says things like, “I'm nobody” and then proceeds to talk about how good it is to be nobody, giving the same sort of isolated mood as her life had. CS: Dickinson's poems, emotionally charged and powerful, conveyed the “real work” of emotional flow described by Mr. Berry.
The poem The Real Work talks about the very powerful real work of emotional art, and these two very different people both do this very similar work. Both sonny and Dickinson funneled their emotions into their artwork, and in so doing, enhanced it beyond belief. They were employed in the most emotional profession of art, their impeded streams singing.
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FAST WORD
CHIASMUS
PARTICIPIAL PHRASE
APPOSITIVE
TRICOLON
HYPERBOLE
Final Exam Essay
Kyle Sebastian
Professor H. Salsich
English 9
6-4-09
Emotional Guidance:
Final Exam Essay
The poem “The Real Work” by Wendell Berry explains that once people relinquish (FAST) their control on life they start their “real journey.” People often give control to their emotions and are led by them all the time. They let how their feeling influence the decisions they make. These decisions make up the different chapters of our lives, and since we each make different decisions, we each have a unique life. Some people try to keep in control of their emotions all the time and try to live life by a schedule. However, it is only when you free yourself of plans and let fate take you where it will when you start on your “real journey.”
Laura, a young girl from the story “The Garden Party” by Katherine Mansfield, is an example of how someone “no longer [knows] which way to go.” (Appositive) Laura was someone who very much liked to be in control. She even was the supervisor for where to put a Marquee for her mother’s garden party. She enjoyed the feeling that everything was going as planned and if something went wrong she would be able to fix it. However, once she heard that a man had died just outside her house she didn’t know what to do. She forgot all about the garden party and focused on the dead man. Her emotions of sympathy for the family of the man caused her to try to stop the garden party, afraid it would offend the family. If Laura was her usual composed self she would never have even thought of stopping the party, but since she was being led by her emotions she made decisions she wouldn’t have usually made. As soon as she let her emotions lead her is when she started on her “real journey.”
Another fictional character, Dexter Green, from “Winter Dreams” by F. Scott Fitzgerald, was also someone who lost control of his emotions. He loved a woman in the story by the name of Judy Jones. She was wild, and interesting, and beautiful, and always exciting (Polysyndeton/Parallelism). He, in fact, never had a dull moment while he was with her. The negative part about Judy, however, was that she was so wild that Dexter had no control over her. She frequently saw other men, which caused Dexter to be devastated and was the foundation his emotions needed to influence him. Since Dexter had no control over the situation with Judy it caused his emotions to be all the more potent (FAST). He “no longer [knew] which way to go” with Judy, which led to the start of his life’s “real journey.”
If people didn’t show their emotions life would be very bland. Everyone would be an emotionless mask and there would be no excitement. Emotions give drama, exude (FAST) excitement, and share meaning to life (3 Action Sentence). We all make decisions based on what we feel is right or wrong and that makes each of our lives inimitable (FAST). Emotions rule who we are and how we live. If you simply live your life by your emotions then you are truly “the [. . .] stream [. . .] that sings.”
Key
Fast Words-(FAST)
Special Terms-Bold
Professor H. Salsich
English 9
6-4-09
Emotional Guidance:
Final Exam Essay
The poem “The Real Work” by Wendell Berry explains that once people relinquish (FAST) their control on life they start their “real journey.” People often give control to their emotions and are led by them all the time. They let how their feeling influence the decisions they make. These decisions make up the different chapters of our lives, and since we each make different decisions, we each have a unique life. Some people try to keep in control of their emotions all the time and try to live life by a schedule. However, it is only when you free yourself of plans and let fate take you where it will when you start on your “real journey.”
Laura, a young girl from the story “The Garden Party” by Katherine Mansfield, is an example of how someone “no longer [knows] which way to go.” (Appositive) Laura was someone who very much liked to be in control. She even was the supervisor for where to put a Marquee for her mother’s garden party. She enjoyed the feeling that everything was going as planned and if something went wrong she would be able to fix it. However, once she heard that a man had died just outside her house she didn’t know what to do. She forgot all about the garden party and focused on the dead man. Her emotions of sympathy for the family of the man caused her to try to stop the garden party, afraid it would offend the family. If Laura was her usual composed self she would never have even thought of stopping the party, but since she was being led by her emotions she made decisions she wouldn’t have usually made. As soon as she let her emotions lead her is when she started on her “real journey.”
Another fictional character, Dexter Green, from “Winter Dreams” by F. Scott Fitzgerald, was also someone who lost control of his emotions. He loved a woman in the story by the name of Judy Jones. She was wild, and interesting, and beautiful, and always exciting (Polysyndeton/Parallelism). He, in fact, never had a dull moment while he was with her. The negative part about Judy, however, was that she was so wild that Dexter had no control over her. She frequently saw other men, which caused Dexter to be devastated and was the foundation his emotions needed to influence him. Since Dexter had no control over the situation with Judy it caused his emotions to be all the more potent (FAST). He “no longer [knew] which way to go” with Judy, which led to the start of his life’s “real journey.”
If people didn’t show their emotions life would be very bland. Everyone would be an emotionless mask and there would be no excitement. Emotions give drama, exude (FAST) excitement, and share meaning to life (3 Action Sentence). We all make decisions based on what we feel is right or wrong and that makes each of our lives inimitable (FAST). Emotions rule who we are and how we live. If you simply live your life by your emotions then you are truly “the [. . .] stream [. . .] that sings.”
Key
Fast Words-(FAST)
Special Terms-Bold
Tuesday, May 26, 2009
Tristan's Essay
Tristan Yerkes
Mr. Salsich
English 02
26th May 2009
Memory Lane:
A Last Essay on the Powers of Memory
There are places I remember, I come back to, and float through, for a second becoming the smiling toddler that no one talked to. Magical places, everyone shares as time capsules of wound up memory, ready to tumble loose into the unwary mind. For William Wordsworth, these old feelings, along with new ones are discovered upon return to Tintern Abbey just as they would be if I were to return to Pine Point in the future.
In “Tintern Abbey”, Wordsworth describes how he relives all of the feelings he had in his youth and how he discovers new ones. Wordsworth may not have been in his youth anymore, “five long years” may have passed, but he still felt and saw the same things he felt and saw five years ago. Wordsworth has “thoughts of more deep seclusion” than he had when he was last at Tintern Abbey. These feelings are brought back up from Wordsworth's well of emotion and the revisit to Tintern Abbey is just a catalyst in the equation. Wordsworth also discovers new emotion on his revisit to Tintern Abbey, new things within himself. When Wordsworth says, “here I stand […] with the sense /..
of present pleasure” he refers to his current emotion, and how he feels upon his revisit. This shows that Wordsworth, while reliving his old emotions, has sub-emotions brewing that are more current. The complexity of the emotions displayed in “Tintern Abbey” are so severe, that the birth of such a poem is almost expected.
These ideas Wordsworth experiences upon re-visitation of Tintern Abbey, would also apply to my re-visitation of Pine Point in the future. I would relive my old feelings while roaming the old halls. I would observe the classrooms, and remember the stressful feelings, the anger, the pressure felt in years past, just like the feelings of joy Wordsworth relives when he walks near Tintern Abbey. I would roam past the rock climbing wall, remembering all of the hours spent thinking of clever announcements. As I drink in my old school, I would also be feeling new things and thinking new thoughts. As I look into small classroom windows, I may realize things I haven't before, like Wordsworth saw new sights in the old sights of Tintern Abbey. I would wonder how my memory lived: Did the school I remembered end up remembering me? The memories Wordsworth had of Tintern Abbey were not the same as those I would have of Pine Point, but they retain the structure of new and old thoughts.
Many old dusty vaults of thought can be unlocked by returning to old places. Just as much, shining, new, beautiful thoughts can be created when one is returned to old places. This happens in both my fictional return to Pine Point, and Wordsworth's very real return to Tintern Abbey. In both, these thoughts are celebrated.
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Fast Word
Tricolon
Loose Sentence
Chiasmus
Kyle's Final Essay
Kyle Sebastian
Professor H. Salsich
English 9
5-27-09
TS: In the poem “Tintern Abbey” by William Wordsworth a main theme I see is in fact Influence. SD: The abbey influenced Wordsworth’s life very deeply when he visited it. CM: He often rushed to his memories of the abbey when he felt overwhelmed with the chaos of the world. CM: The line “these beauteous forms [. . .] in lonely rooms, and ‘mid the din / [. . .] of towns and cities [. . .] I have owed” explains how he used his memories of the abbey as a relief. SD: The influence of the abbey had stayed with Wordsworth ever since he left it. CM: In the line “thou art with me here upon the banks / [. . .] of this fair river” Wordsworth is saying that on the “banks” of the “fair river” called life Tintern Abbey is with him, he has never forgotten it. CM: It had become one of the most influential places he had ever been to. SD: The abbey had captivated him in a strange way. CM: It did not give him an inspiring speech or do things in a courageous way. CM: Instead the abbey entranced him with its sheer beauty and seclusion from the world. CS: Influence is a theme we see in countless books, movies, plays, and historic moments, yet somehow it never produces a dull story.
TS: Pine Point has influenced my morals and values and has left an everlasting impression on me. SD: Pine Point has taught me things that I will use for the rest of my life. CM: Not only has it taught me how to say the magic words, but I’ve also learned how to interact with people, how to treat people like they want to be treated, how to truly be a part of a community that gives back (Parallelism). CM: Pine Point has taught me things that I need so that I can achieve my goals and enjoy my life. SD: Pine Point has also supported me throughout some of my toughest times yet. CM: The parents and students of Pine Point have given me their hospitality and kindness and showed me that “on the banks of this delightful stream / [. . .] we [stand] together.” CM: The friends I have made at Pine Point have especially supported me during my fifteen years of living by using what Pine Point has taught them to be good friends. SD: If I came back to visit Pine Point after five years it would be like coming back to one of the few safe havens in the world. CM: In five years I would have experienced many disappointing things that life has to offer and coming back to Pine Point would simply make me forget all about them. CM: I would instantly call back memories of friends laughing in the halls, teachers lecturing me about juvenile things, and even homework that I had to do. CS: Going back to such an influential place in my life could only hold the purest form of amazement for me.
TS: In the poem "The Writer" by Richard Wilbur influence is also a theme. SD: A bird is used as a metaphor to show the connection between a girl and why her father is wishing her good luck. CM: The bird is described as "clearing the sill of the world", which refers to the girl clearing her own "sill" out into the world. CM: In a way the bird influences the reader's mind so that they can make the connection to what the father means when he says "I wish her a lucky passage". SD: The bird is an essential piece in this poem's puzzle even though it seems like an insignificant add on. CM: Without the bird there would be no connection between the girl leaving and her father wishing her a "lucky passage." CM: With the bird the reader can more easily make the connection between the girl leaving her father and the father wishing her good luck on her way. CS: Some of the smallest things can carry a meaning bigger than themselves.
Influence has been used by some of the most diabolical minds in history including Benito Mussolini, Joseph Stalin, Adolf Hitler, and Osama Bin Laden (Tetracolon). However, it has also been used by some of the most influential like Gandhi, the Dalai Lama, and even Barack Obama. No matter how it’s used the power of influence is unarguably very strong. The power to use influence after all, is the power to control minds.
Self Assessment
1.) Issues that I've always had and are continuing to have is using correct punctuation whether its a simple comma error or forgetting the rules of independent clauses.
2.) I like that my essay seems to relate to the overall topic of influence through the entire thing.
3.) One of the weaknesses I see is that I didn't really pick challenging exam meterial to use in mmy essay.
Professor H. Salsich
English 9
5-27-09
The Power of Influence:
An Essay on Influence and its impact
Influence is a very powerful thing; it is used by some of the most important people in the world, but the most important thing about it is that anyone can use it. The influence of Martin King Jr. caused thousands of people to fight for their sovereignity (FAST). He started with nothing, but a dream and turned it into a reality. The influence of even the smallest things can lead to some of the greatest moments in history. Pine Point’s influence will live on with me throughout my life so that I too may make a difference in history. An Essay on Influence and its impact
TS: In the poem “Tintern Abbey” by William Wordsworth a main theme I see is in fact Influence. SD: The abbey influenced Wordsworth’s life very deeply when he visited it. CM: He often rushed to his memories of the abbey when he felt overwhelmed with the chaos of the world. CM: The line “these beauteous forms [. . .] in lonely rooms, and ‘mid the din / [. . .] of towns and cities [. . .] I have owed” explains how he used his memories of the abbey as a relief. SD: The influence of the abbey had stayed with Wordsworth ever since he left it. CM: In the line “thou art with me here upon the banks / [. . .] of this fair river” Wordsworth is saying that on the “banks” of the “fair river” called life Tintern Abbey is with him, he has never forgotten it. CM: It had become one of the most influential places he had ever been to. SD: The abbey had captivated him in a strange way. CM: It did not give him an inspiring speech or do things in a courageous way. CM: Instead the abbey entranced him with its sheer beauty and seclusion from the world. CS: Influence is a theme we see in countless books, movies, plays, and historic moments, yet somehow it never produces a dull story.
TS: Pine Point has influenced my morals and values and has left an everlasting impression on me. SD: Pine Point has taught me things that I will use for the rest of my life. CM: Not only has it taught me how to say the magic words, but I’ve also learned how to interact with people, how to treat people like they want to be treated, how to truly be a part of a community that gives back (Parallelism). CM: Pine Point has taught me things that I need so that I can achieve my goals and enjoy my life. SD: Pine Point has also supported me throughout some of my toughest times yet. CM: The parents and students of Pine Point have given me their hospitality and kindness and showed me that “on the banks of this delightful stream / [. . .] we [stand] together.” CM: The friends I have made at Pine Point have especially supported me during my fifteen years of living by using what Pine Point has taught them to be good friends. SD: If I came back to visit Pine Point after five years it would be like coming back to one of the few safe havens in the world. CM: In five years I would have experienced many disappointing things that life has to offer and coming back to Pine Point would simply make me forget all about them. CM: I would instantly call back memories of friends laughing in the halls, teachers lecturing me about juvenile things, and even homework that I had to do. CS: Going back to such an influential place in my life could only hold the purest form of amazement for me.
TS: In the poem "The Writer" by Richard Wilbur influence is also a theme. SD: A bird is used as a metaphor to show the connection between a girl and why her father is wishing her good luck. CM: The bird is described as "clearing the sill of the world", which refers to the girl clearing her own "sill" out into the world. CM: In a way the bird influences the reader's mind so that they can make the connection to what the father means when he says "I wish her a lucky passage". SD: The bird is an essential piece in this poem's puzzle even though it seems like an insignificant add on. CM: Without the bird there would be no connection between the girl leaving and her father wishing her a "lucky passage." CM: With the bird the reader can more easily make the connection between the girl leaving her father and the father wishing her good luck on her way. CS: Some of the smallest things can carry a meaning bigger than themselves.
Influence has been used by some of the most diabolical minds in history including Benito Mussolini, Joseph Stalin, Adolf Hitler, and Osama Bin Laden (Tetracolon). However, it has also been used by some of the most influential like Gandhi, the Dalai Lama, and even Barack Obama. No matter how it’s used the power of influence is unarguably very strong. The power to use influence after all, is the power to control minds.
Self Assessment
1.) Issues that I've always had and are continuing to have is using correct punctuation whether its a simple comma error or forgetting the rules of independent clauses.
2.) I like that my essay seems to relate to the overall topic of influence through the entire thing.
3.) One of the weaknesses I see is that I didn't really pick challenging exam meterial to use in mmy essay.
Ty's FINAL essay
Ty LeVarge
Mr. Hamilton Salsich
English 02
May 26, 2009
Ruins are said to hold deep secrets. Tintern Abbey was one of those ruins that is popular even today. It was a sacred place to the poet William Wordsworth. I will also return to a sacred place of mine five years from now.
In Wordsworth's poem, "Tintern Abbey", he reflects on how he is seeing Tintern Abbey after five long years. He reflects upon how divine the Abbye seems after its aging years of being alone. The roof was taken off because of the new ruler in Wordsworth's time period and made the abbey closer to being a ruin. Later, it was overgrown with trees, grass and animals that made their home in the Abbey. Wordsworth speaks mainly of the Abbey's landscape and how it has changed since he last saw it. He remembers its beauty before it became more well known by tourists. Now, he sees it tamed and controled and not as natural as he remembered. He appreciates Tintern Abbey no matter how it may look.
Similarly, like Wordsworth, I will return to a sacred place in my life, Pine Point School. I will have returned and encounter memories as i walk into each individual classroom. I walk into Mr. Salsich's room and remember all of the good and bad memories of my past years. I would also explore the computer room and remember our math classes and computer classes we had in there. As I would explore the school, I would probably have sudden memories of certain events. Ideas would appear in my head of things like conversations with friends, classes, dances, and sports. Many memories would appear and make their way into my mind making them fresh again. Seeing this school after five years is going to be a wonderful experience.
Which is more educational, Ruins or places of knowledge? They are both about secrets and old memories. Artifacts and books are holders of secrets. Memories, dust, and knowledge are all that remains when someone leaves for five years.
Thursday, May 14, 2009
Ty's essay
Ty LeVarge
Mr. Salsich
English 02
May 13, 2009
The Stones of Time:
An Essay on a Garden Stone, Two Poems, and My Life
(1) What if transformation happened every day? (2) Believe it or not, transformation is always happening. (3) All objects are undergoing mutations and transformations every minute. (4)Everything we see is undergoing a transformation.
TS The garden stone is very similar to the poems written by the German Poet, Rainer Maria Rilke. SD The garden stone is a stone that is weak on its own, but undergoes a transformation. CM Alone, the stone is just a slab of rock in a crazy shape. CM However, when placed in a stone walkway, it becomes part of something beautiful. SD Also, the garden stone has the smoothness and has left history of who stepped there like how like Rilke describes in one of his poems. CM He says, “but the courageous morning melody that hovers and shimmers behind their fading steps” and that seeing, leaves a record in your mind of what you saw and what it did. CM The garden stone keeps the dirt and the weight that was beared (FAST) upon it. CS Everything in life leaves behind a footprint; figurative, or literal, and that footprint is always remembered by every speck of dirt and every inanimate object that that object has left upon the stone.
TS The stone is very similar to my life in one, very specific way; I have transformed as the stone can. SD Like the stone, I was once an individual that was separate from the rest. CM Five years ago, I was a separate unit, alone, helpless, vague. CM The stone is similar because it was new to its environment and was lost. SD Now, in the present time, the stone and I, have changed. CM The stone is now part of an elegant garden and serves as a piece of one walkway. CM This year, we have all become closer as one and I am now part of that walkway making its way from point A to point B. CS All objects, living, and inanimate, can change drastically over a short period of time.
TS Similarly, In both of his poems, Rilke makes many interesting points and ideas. SD One that stuck out to me, is transformation. CM In his first poem he states, "… life is transformation: all that is good is transformation and all that is bad as well" and he means that every event is a change in someone's life. CM Changes always affect someone spiritually and may change the way they think. SD I also like the statement he makes in the second poem. CM He says, "out of whose depths their dearest secrets speak" He seems to be telling that within everything, is a secret that was kept away for a long time. CM After a long time, that those secrets are revealed to all around it. CS Strange how all of life's mysteries revolve around the simplest actions.
(1) We see transformation. (2) We reveal secrets. (3) All happen sometime in our lifetime. (4) We have no power to alter it because only ourselvees can control the transformation, and transfromation is the most powerful
Mr. Salsich
English 02
May 13, 2009
The Stones of Time:
An Essay on a Garden Stone, Two Poems, and My Life
(1) What if transformation happened every day? (2) Believe it or not, transformation is always happening. (3) All objects are undergoing mutations and transformations every minute. (4)Everything we see is undergoing a transformation.
TS The garden stone is very similar to the poems written by the German Poet, Rainer Maria Rilke. SD The garden stone is a stone that is weak on its own, but undergoes a transformation. CM Alone, the stone is just a slab of rock in a crazy shape. CM However, when placed in a stone walkway, it becomes part of something beautiful. SD Also, the garden stone has the smoothness and has left history of who stepped there like how like Rilke describes in one of his poems. CM He says, “but the courageous morning melody that hovers and shimmers behind their fading steps” and that seeing, leaves a record in your mind of what you saw and what it did. CM The garden stone keeps the dirt and the weight that was beared (FAST) upon it. CS Everything in life leaves behind a footprint; figurative, or literal, and that footprint is always remembered by every speck of dirt and every inanimate object that that object has left upon the stone.
TS The stone is very similar to my life in one, very specific way; I have transformed as the stone can. SD Like the stone, I was once an individual that was separate from the rest. CM Five years ago, I was a separate unit, alone, helpless, vague. CM The stone is similar because it was new to its environment and was lost. SD Now, in the present time, the stone and I, have changed. CM The stone is now part of an elegant garden and serves as a piece of one walkway. CM This year, we have all become closer as one and I am now part of that walkway making its way from point A to point B. CS All objects, living, and inanimate, can change drastically over a short period of time.
TS Similarly, In both of his poems, Rilke makes many interesting points and ideas. SD One that stuck out to me, is transformation. CM In his first poem he states, "… life is transformation: all that is good is transformation and all that is bad as well" and he means that every event is a change in someone's life. CM Changes always affect someone spiritually and may change the way they think. SD I also like the statement he makes in the second poem. CM He says, "out of whose depths their dearest secrets speak" He seems to be telling that within everything, is a secret that was kept away for a long time. CM After a long time, that those secrets are revealed to all around it. CS Strange how all of life's mysteries revolve around the simplest actions.
(1) We see transformation. (2) We reveal secrets. (3) All happen sometime in our lifetime. (4) We have no power to alter it because only ourselvees can control the transformation, and transfromation is the most powerful
Wednesday, May 13, 2009
Kyle's Essay
Kyle Sebastian
Professor H.Salsich
English 9
19 May 2009
One always uncovers the mysteries that lay within themselves as they continue their journey in life. As we continue to evolve as a people we continue to find things that suggest how we once were and things that help us discover how we have changed. We will continue to let go of things, gain new things, and in turn change as all life does.
TS: Often overlooked and forgotten about, stones are some of the most boring yet interesting things on this planet (Appositive Opener). SD: The garden stoneis no doubt a solid object. CM: You can clearly feel the rough texture and feel the sheer hardness of it. CM: As in all solid objects a stone is easily picked up, which reminds me of when Rilke writes “so ready to grasp” this supports the idea of how easy some things are to take and are done whatever with. SD: Another example is that a stone is often a symbol for being strong, robust (FAST), or unmovable. CM: When I read “strong and sturdy” in Rilke’s passage I instantly thought of a stone. CM: A stone is one of the simplest symbols of something “strong and sturdy” so it was an easy connection to make. SD: Another thing is that stones can be very old, lying dormant in the ground for thousands of years and even encase things inside them. CM: When Rilke writes “out of whose depths their secrets speak” it reminds me about how a stone or a fossil can be uncovered that is millions of years old and can tell you secrets about what happened in the past. CM: The thought that something so ordinary can basically uncover the unknown in astonishing. CS: Stones are truly some peculiar things, looking ordinary on the outside, but holding untold treasures on the inside (Participle Closer).
TS: I have found fossils inside myself that show me what kind of person I truly have become. SD: I discovered that if I really work hard for the things I want then I can get them. CM: This year I’ve really tried to stay on top of my grades and so far it has been one of my best years academically. CM: You can take the hard way and work for something, or you can take the easy way and do nothing for nothing in return. (Antithesis?) SD: I have also noticed that I have changed since I was in Kindergarten, no doubt thanks to Pine Point. CM: I came to this school only interacting with the family that was already here and closing myself off from everyone else. CM: Now in ninth grade I am more outgoing and its easier to interact with people than it was ten years ago. SD: I have also noticed that all of my closest friends have the same things in common; loyalty, kindness, a sense of humor, and a genuine character (Tetracolon). CM: I’ve never specifically picked who my friends are, but rather called the people that I’ve gotten the most contiguous (FAST) to or are the most comfortable with friends. CM: Never have I noticed that they all had the same qualities in common until I started thinking about next year without some of them. CS: All of these “fossils” I’ve recently dug up have shown me the “secrets” within the “depths” of myself.
TS: Such as their are different fossils holding different organisms I found different lines held different meanings in this passage. SD: The line “If God had only made our hands to be like our eyes - so ready to grasp, so willing to relinquish all things” means that our eyes can let go of things so much easier than our hands. CM: When our eyes gaze upon something they, in a sense, hold it and whenever they close they instantly let go of it. CM: However, when our hands close they only grasp tighter around what it was they were holding. SD: “Property is poverty and fear” because when you hold something dear to you, you “fear” to lose it and once it is lost you feel like your in a state of “poverty.” CM: Poverty is not only lack of money, but can be a lack of anything so its understandable to feel like your in poverty when you’ve lost something important to you. CM: You can only be free of “poverty” and “fear” if you let go of things willingly; that way when you don’t have anything, you have nothing to lose. SD: The final line that drew my attention was "Once out of our hands, however, things ought to move forward, now sturdy and strong, and we should keep nothing of them but the courageous morning melody that hovers and shimmers behind their fading steps." CM: This line explains that once we let go of things they aren't just forgotten, but instead they move forward. CM: A great and apt example of this is the dreaded departing of Pine Point, which so many of us fear, but once we leave, Pine Point will continue to prosper in real life and in our minds.
Rocks and fossils share a similarity to what kind of person you truly are. Rocks and fossils hold some of the things that are truly unique to the earth as your own quirks do for you. Our personality is what makes up who we are and what we stand for, don't ever forget it.
Professor H.Salsich
English 9
19 May 2009
Past, Future, and Present:
An Essay on a Passage by Rainer Maria Rilke
One always uncovers the mysteries that lay within themselves as they continue their journey in life. As we continue to evolve as a people we continue to find things that suggest how we once were and things that help us discover how we have changed. We will continue to let go of things, gain new things, and in turn change as all life does.
TS: Often overlooked and forgotten about, stones are some of the most boring yet interesting things on this planet (Appositive Opener). SD: The garden stoneis no doubt a solid object. CM: You can clearly feel the rough texture and feel the sheer hardness of it. CM: As in all solid objects a stone is easily picked up, which reminds me of when Rilke writes “so ready to grasp” this supports the idea of how easy some things are to take and are done whatever with. SD: Another example is that a stone is often a symbol for being strong, robust (FAST), or unmovable. CM: When I read “strong and sturdy” in Rilke’s passage I instantly thought of a stone. CM: A stone is one of the simplest symbols of something “strong and sturdy” so it was an easy connection to make. SD: Another thing is that stones can be very old, lying dormant in the ground for thousands of years and even encase things inside them. CM: When Rilke writes “out of whose depths their secrets speak” it reminds me about how a stone or a fossil can be uncovered that is millions of years old and can tell you secrets about what happened in the past. CM: The thought that something so ordinary can basically uncover the unknown in astonishing. CS: Stones are truly some peculiar things, looking ordinary on the outside, but holding untold treasures on the inside (Participle Closer).
TS: I have found fossils inside myself that show me what kind of person I truly have become. SD: I discovered that if I really work hard for the things I want then I can get them. CM: This year I’ve really tried to stay on top of my grades and so far it has been one of my best years academically. CM: You can take the hard way and work for something, or you can take the easy way and do nothing for nothing in return. (Antithesis?) SD: I have also noticed that I have changed since I was in Kindergarten, no doubt thanks to Pine Point. CM: I came to this school only interacting with the family that was already here and closing myself off from everyone else. CM: Now in ninth grade I am more outgoing and its easier to interact with people than it was ten years ago. SD: I have also noticed that all of my closest friends have the same things in common; loyalty, kindness, a sense of humor, and a genuine character (Tetracolon). CM: I’ve never specifically picked who my friends are, but rather called the people that I’ve gotten the most contiguous (FAST) to or are the most comfortable with friends. CM: Never have I noticed that they all had the same qualities in common until I started thinking about next year without some of them. CS: All of these “fossils” I’ve recently dug up have shown me the “secrets” within the “depths” of myself.
TS: Such as their are different fossils holding different organisms I found different lines held different meanings in this passage. SD: The line “If God had only made our hands to be like our eyes - so ready to grasp, so willing to relinquish all things” means that our eyes can let go of things so much easier than our hands. CM: When our eyes gaze upon something they, in a sense, hold it and whenever they close they instantly let go of it. CM: However, when our hands close they only grasp tighter around what it was they were holding. SD: “Property is poverty and fear” because when you hold something dear to you, you “fear” to lose it and once it is lost you feel like your in a state of “poverty.” CM: Poverty is not only lack of money, but can be a lack of anything so its understandable to feel like your in poverty when you’ve lost something important to you. CM: You can only be free of “poverty” and “fear” if you let go of things willingly; that way when you don’t have anything, you have nothing to lose. SD: The final line that drew my attention was "Once out of our hands, however, things ought to move forward, now sturdy and strong, and we should keep nothing of them but the courageous morning melody that hovers and shimmers behind their fading steps." CM: This line explains that once we let go of things they aren't just forgotten, but instead they move forward. CM: A great and apt example of this is the dreaded departing of Pine Point, which so many of us fear, but once we leave, Pine Point will continue to prosper in real life and in our minds.
Rocks and fossils share a similarity to what kind of person you truly are. Rocks and fossils hold some of the things that are truly unique to the earth as your own quirks do for you. Our personality is what makes up who we are and what we stand for, don't ever forget it.
Tristan's Essay!
Tristan Yerkes
Mr. Salsich
English 02
13 May, 2009
The Middle Way:
An Essay Discussing Possession
If you hold a peach too firmly, it will be smashed; this is an idea represented by a passage by Rainer Maria Rilke, a garden stone, and my personal beliefs. Detachment can not only save the possessor, but it can also strengthen the possession.
The second passage by Mr. Rilke shows how one must embody the concept of detachment. Rilke shows how we must always let go of, or be able to let go of our worldly possessions. When Rilke says, “We do not acquire wealth by letting something remain [...] in our hands” he means that everything means much more when we let go of it. Mr. Rilke displays this concept of parting with what we own as a sort of way for us to experience the things we let go without letting them take us over. Rilke also shows how our infatuation with possessions can be our downfall. Being human, we all have trouble letting go of our paraphernalia can be very hard, but Rilke says that if we do, we will live our life to the fullest. When Rilke says, “Our hands ought not to be a coffin for us but a bed” he is suggesting that our hands, symbolism for our possession, should not cling, and be our death or coffin, but feel things, and be a bed. Rilke's thoughts really show that we own our possessions, but our possessions can own us.
A garden stone and this Rilke passage both relate, being about letting things go. The garden stone must let beautiful things pass by it, and not hold onto anything, just as the Rilke passage says. Every day, people and animals step on the stone, acknowledge it, use it, impart some of themselves upon it, and then leave it. The stone is “letting everything pass through [its] grasp” so that it may have “carefree ownership” of the beautiful things in life. If a garden stone cannot be easily stepped onto and off of, it does not do its job, and is replaced. Rilke says that “Once out of our hands, however, things ought to move forward, now sturdy and strong” it's the garden stone's job to make sure the things that step onto it make it on, and if it doesn't, this becomes its failure, its downfall, its “coffin”. The garden stone must hold its role, let things pass by, enhance them, and do its job flawlessly or else suffer repercussions. The Rilke passage is suggesting that we must all lay like the garden stone, and serve as a helper to others, bringing them into our grasp, and letting them pass through, stronger.
Rilke's passage says that garden stone must make things stronger, and my belief is that this holds true for people as well. Many people in our world hold personal possessions, comfort, and gain close to themselves, people should not fritter away their comforts all to themselves. In the Rilke passage, Rilke says, “We do not acquire wealth by letting something remain and wilt in our hands” this shows that we should not hold on to things for too long. If people hold on to things long enough, they start to ruin those things. If people learn to let things go, they can, in a way, own the things. When we hold things too closely, we aren't able to see them from far away, and cease to recognize their beauty. By not owning these things, we own them. My beliefs are quite similar if not the same to Rilke's, we agree about ownership, we agree about greed, and we agree about possession.
The many faces of greed all come down to the one fact: whether you're crushing a peach, or not letting things walk over you, holding onto possessions is not the right way. This does not mean that people should all go out and give away all of their money, this simply suggests that nowadays the human race as a whole tends to hold material goods too closely. We should all find a middle way in life.
KEY:
Fast Words
Participial Phrase (opener)
Participial Phrase (closer)
Tetracolon Climax
Antithesis
Chiasmus
Tricolon
Parallelism
Loose Sentence
In my writing, I am working on fixing my careless errors, and managing my time.
I think for this essay, I did very well with the special tools, and I think that I especially utilized all forms of parallelism.
I think I could have worked on my transitions, and my introductory paragraph. Oh, and one thing I worked out was finding out what the self-assessment was finally.
I would give myself an A, and I think this was my best essay all year
Wednesday, May 6, 2009
Ty's essay
Ty LeVarge
Mr Hamilton Salsich
English 02
May 4, 2009
Goodbye:
An Essay on How Two Poems Relate to My Life
What is the action of separating and saying goodbye? Separation is a natural cycle that takes place for everyone. We all have to say goodbye to someone during one part of our life. Everyone meets someone new, and they soon have to say goodbye for a short time, or maybe forever
In the poem by Emily Dickinson, she describes parting as a separation from everyone and everything around you. In the first stanza, she says, “If immortality unveil /A third event to me.” This says that she has seen too much of being partitioned with family members and other beings she loved. She seems to have written this stanza with sorrow as if she has lost many dear to her life. Similarly, in the second stanza, she says, “Parting is all we know of Heaven, / And all we need of hell.” Here, she says that when you die, wherever you go, you will have parted from the entire world. She says that where you go after you pass away does not matter, because you will have parted from all that you have had and all that you have left behind. Overall, her poem seems to have been made out of the tears that she has shed from the years before.
In the poem by Naomi Shihab Nye, she expresses parting as a good thing and that it should also be something to be wary of. In the poem “Adios”, she says that you should get to know the word “goodbye” and to bond with it. In the first stanza, she says, “Use it. Learn where it begins, / the small alphabet of departure” and she says that you should know it inside and out. Similarly, she says near the end of the poem, “Think of things that disappear. / Think of what you love best, / what brings tears to your eyes.” She means that you should remember everyone that you love and know that at any instance, they can disappear. You may see someone you love before you go to school, but after school, you come home to find them to have disappeared from your life. Together, being something good, and something that should not be tampered with can run its natural course without you.
At the end of my career at Pine Point, I and many others will be parting from each other. “We were part of something special” is a quote from my speech and I believe it to be true. As the class of 2009, we have shared a bond that has lasted years. We were inseparable for the time we have been together. Now, we are nearing the end of the year as ninth graders and we have cherished the memories that we have had through the years. From random events of joy, to times where we have had tears of sorrow, we enjoyed every moment. We shared it all and we went through it all together. Now, it is May and we are nearing the final weeks of being together as a class. There are many times where we wish to have gone back in time to relive those moments and to save time so that we can stay together. We can still save time by spending as much of the time we have left enjoying ourselves and sharing with friends. We can still IM and Facebook each other, but we will never feel the same.
Parting is everyone’s worst fear and greatest enemy. However, without separation, there would be no reason to truly love someone. Everyone would exist in unity, but without true loving and care for all people. For anyone to get the biggest benefit before being severed from those you love, you and all others need to live together, and live out loud.
Mr Hamilton Salsich
English 02
May 4, 2009
Goodbye:
An Essay on How Two Poems Relate to My Life
What is the action of separating and saying goodbye? Separation is a natural cycle that takes place for everyone. We all have to say goodbye to someone during one part of our life. Everyone meets someone new, and they soon have to say goodbye for a short time, or maybe forever
In the poem by Emily Dickinson, she describes parting as a separation from everyone and everything around you. In the first stanza, she says, “If immortality unveil /A third event to me.” This says that she has seen too much of being partitioned with family members and other beings she loved. She seems to have written this stanza with sorrow as if she has lost many dear to her life. Similarly, in the second stanza, she says, “Parting is all we know of Heaven, / And all we need of hell.” Here, she says that when you die, wherever you go, you will have parted from the entire world. She says that where you go after you pass away does not matter, because you will have parted from all that you have had and all that you have left behind. Overall, her poem seems to have been made out of the tears that she has shed from the years before.
In the poem by Naomi Shihab Nye, she expresses parting as a good thing and that it should also be something to be wary of. In the poem “Adios”, she says that you should get to know the word “goodbye” and to bond with it. In the first stanza, she says, “Use it. Learn where it begins, / the small alphabet of departure” and she says that you should know it inside and out. Similarly, she says near the end of the poem, “Think of things that disappear. / Think of what you love best, / what brings tears to your eyes.” She means that you should remember everyone that you love and know that at any instance, they can disappear. You may see someone you love before you go to school, but after school, you come home to find them to have disappeared from your life. Together, being something good, and something that should not be tampered with can run its natural course without you.
At the end of my career at Pine Point, I and many others will be parting from each other. “We were part of something special” is a quote from my speech and I believe it to be true. As the class of 2009, we have shared a bond that has lasted years. We were inseparable for the time we have been together. Now, we are nearing the end of the year as ninth graders and we have cherished the memories that we have had through the years. From random events of joy, to times where we have had tears of sorrow, we enjoyed every moment. We shared it all and we went through it all together. Now, it is May and we are nearing the final weeks of being together as a class. There are many times where we wish to have gone back in time to relive those moments and to save time so that we can stay together. We can still save time by spending as much of the time we have left enjoying ourselves and sharing with friends. We can still IM and Facebook each other, but we will never feel the same.
Parting is everyone’s worst fear and greatest enemy. However, without separation, there would be no reason to truly love someone. Everyone would exist in unity, but without true loving and care for all people. For anyone to get the biggest benefit before being severed from those you love, you and all others need to live together, and live out loud.
Tuesday, May 5, 2009
Teddy's Essay
5/5/09
Teddy
Mr. Salsich
Room 2
Parting:
An Essay
Tristan's Essay!
Tristan Yerkes
Mr. Salsich
English 02
6 April 2009
“Parting is such sweet sorrow”, almost everyone knows this famous Shakespearian quote from Romeo and Juliet, but the concept of parting also has meaning in “Adios” by Naomi Shihab Nye, “Untitled” by Emily Dickinson, and my life. The concept of parting is tough, and many have to deal with it in their lives. In this essay, we will examine how parting affects these two poems and my life.
My life is full of parting, I part with friends on a yearly basis, and I started my school career by moving around a lot. My school career has been recovered from this, some may say, shaky foundation, but this just goes to show that parting makes us stronger. This strength of parting is built off of the basis of independence from common people, places and things. I say common people because everyone needs to depend on something, and my independence is just the relocating of my common dependence to constants in my life, like myself, my family, my camp, and the joys in my life. These constants regulate my dependence, the things I cannot part from, but my strength itself helps me be free, go places, and do things. The strength that allows me this freedom to part with things is basically the strength to cut earthly ties, and leave what is important to me. When I have to leave what is important to me, I do not hesitate to part, this is how I mustered up the courage to go away to my summer camp, which later became a constant in my life. I say it is courage that drives me to part from my friends, family, and homes, many would perceive this as pure heartlessness, and that I simply do not have strong bonds with my friends. The bonds I have with my friends are very strong, as many would agree, and I do not part from them for lack of caring about my friends, family, or home. I part because my dependence is elsewhere, with the constants I cannot part with, I do not need my friends at the my current home for survival, and I think many of them do not need me. In a way, my relocation of dependence may be viewed as a bad foundation for life, but my strength through parting has made me very good at balancing, whereas many have built their foundations strong, but very confined, causing their lives to topple when they have to grow. (Loose Sentence)
Despite others’ life foundations, Ms. Nye’s poem, “Adios” gives views as to how the narrator of the poem, presumably Nye, accepts parting, and uses it for strength. This strength is shown through symbolism in the second and third stanza. The symbolism is shown by the narrator telling the reader to take the parting, and the feelings associated with that parting, and make them strengthening parts of one’s life. These strengthening parts of one’s life are marriage shown as a “golden ring” one must “marry” parting and freedom, shown as “wings”, one must “strap [parting] on [one’s] back”. As well as symbolizing how you must treat that parting, showing how that parting helps you, and saying this in a strong, and insightful way, “Adios” shows that you must think of the things you are parting with to be strong. (Periodic Sentence) When Nye says, “Think of things that linger”, she tries to enhance (SAT Fast Word) the feeling of parting with unwanted things, that lie around, and “linger” so that one can understand the concept of parting better. This comprehension of parting with lingering things helps, but Nye also talks about parting with good things when she says, “Think of what you love best.” Along with making one think about good things that they part with, Nye shows how accepting the feelings associated with parting can strengthen one.
Ms. Nye’s poem expresses some of the best ways to feel about parting, but Ms. Dickinson’s untitled poem shows how parting affects one’s life. Parting affects one’s life, first in a pessimistic way. This pessimistic way is the idea of looking at the good things in life, and only thinking about how you have to part with them. The idea of only thinking about parting with good things is expressed when Dickinson says, “Parting is all we know of Heaven”, saying that “we” only know that we must part with heaven. Heaven is mentioned in the second to last line, but the last line mentions hell. Hell is mentioned in the last line, when Dickinson says, “[Parting is] all we need of hell. This is showing that parting basically is the symbolic hell, and that all we need for hell is to experience parting. To experience parting is an experience that can have many mixed and melancholy (Fast Word) feelings, many of which are shown in Ms. Dickinson’s poem.
Ms. Dickinson’s poem displays excellent points about parting, as do the other two paragraphs. Parting can be shown in many different ways, and whether it is displayed as sweet sorrow, or being shown as a strengthening force, parting has a huge impact on many people. Many have benefited from Parting, and many have suffered, but at this point, my thoughts will part with this essay.
SA
I think that I did a great job managing my time, and finally mastering periodic sentences.
I think I need to improve my transitions. (also, Mr. Salsich, I did underline all of my transitions, but the blog doesn't have underlining, so could I maybe just show you or e-mail it to you or something?)
Mr. Salsich
English 02
6 April 2009
“Parting is such sweet sorrow”, almost everyone knows this famous Shakespearian quote from Romeo and Juliet, but the concept of parting also has meaning in “Adios” by Naomi Shihab Nye, “Untitled” by Emily Dickinson, and my life. The concept of parting is tough, and many have to deal with it in their lives. In this essay, we will examine how parting affects these two poems and my life.
My life is full of parting, I part with friends on a yearly basis, and I started my school career by moving around a lot. My school career has been recovered from this, some may say, shaky foundation, but this just goes to show that parting makes us stronger. This strength of parting is built off of the basis of independence from common people, places and things. I say common people because everyone needs to depend on something, and my independence is just the relocating of my common dependence to constants in my life, like myself, my family, my camp, and the joys in my life. These constants regulate my dependence, the things I cannot part from, but my strength itself helps me be free, go places, and do things. The strength that allows me this freedom to part with things is basically the strength to cut earthly ties, and leave what is important to me. When I have to leave what is important to me, I do not hesitate to part, this is how I mustered up the courage to go away to my summer camp, which later became a constant in my life. I say it is courage that drives me to part from my friends, family, and homes, many would perceive this as pure heartlessness, and that I simply do not have strong bonds with my friends. The bonds I have with my friends are very strong, as many would agree, and I do not part from them for lack of caring about my friends, family, or home. I part because my dependence is elsewhere, with the constants I cannot part with, I do not need my friends at the my current home for survival, and I think many of them do not need me. In a way, my relocation of dependence may be viewed as a bad foundation for life, but my strength through parting has made me very good at balancing, whereas many have built their foundations strong, but very confined, causing their lives to topple when they have to grow. (Loose Sentence)
Despite others’ life foundations, Ms. Nye’s poem, “Adios” gives views as to how the narrator of the poem, presumably Nye, accepts parting, and uses it for strength. This strength is shown through symbolism in the second and third stanza. The symbolism is shown by the narrator telling the reader to take the parting, and the feelings associated with that parting, and make them strengthening parts of one’s life. These strengthening parts of one’s life are marriage shown as a “golden ring” one must “marry” parting and freedom, shown as “wings”, one must “strap [parting] on [one’s] back”. As well as symbolizing how you must treat that parting, showing how that parting helps you, and saying this in a strong, and insightful way, “Adios” shows that you must think of the things you are parting with to be strong. (Periodic Sentence) When Nye says, “Think of things that linger”, she tries to enhance (SAT Fast Word) the feeling of parting with unwanted things, that lie around, and “linger” so that one can understand the concept of parting better. This comprehension of parting with lingering things helps, but Nye also talks about parting with good things when she says, “Think of what you love best.” Along with making one think about good things that they part with, Nye shows how accepting the feelings associated with parting can strengthen one.
Ms. Nye’s poem expresses some of the best ways to feel about parting, but Ms. Dickinson’s untitled poem shows how parting affects one’s life. Parting affects one’s life, first in a pessimistic way. This pessimistic way is the idea of looking at the good things in life, and only thinking about how you have to part with them. The idea of only thinking about parting with good things is expressed when Dickinson says, “Parting is all we know of Heaven”, saying that “we” only know that we must part with heaven. Heaven is mentioned in the second to last line, but the last line mentions hell. Hell is mentioned in the last line, when Dickinson says, “[Parting is] all we need of hell. This is showing that parting basically is the symbolic hell, and that all we need for hell is to experience parting. To experience parting is an experience that can have many mixed and melancholy (Fast Word) feelings, many of which are shown in Ms. Dickinson’s poem.
Ms. Dickinson’s poem displays excellent points about parting, as do the other two paragraphs. Parting can be shown in many different ways, and whether it is displayed as sweet sorrow, or being shown as a strengthening force, parting has a huge impact on many people. Many have benefited from Parting, and many have suffered, but at this point, my thoughts will part with this essay.
SA
I think that I did a great job managing my time, and finally mastering periodic sentences.
I think I need to improve my transitions. (also, Mr. Salsich, I did underline all of my transitions, but the blog doesn't have underlining, so could I maybe just show you or e-mail it to you or something?)
Monday, May 4, 2009
Kyle's Parting Essay
Kyle Sebastian
Professor H. Salsich
English 9
4 May 2009
Doors Open and Close:
An Essay on Parting
TS: Sometimes something positive can also have negative effects. SD: An example is something called parting. CM: Parting is necessary to move on in life so one can grow, like leaving an old school to go to a new school. CM: However, sometimes it can be dismal and cause pain, like saying goodbye to a loved one for a time or for eternity.
TS: In Naomi Shihab Nye’s Poem “Adios” I saw several things that related to parting. SD: The first was that the poem itself revolved around a word that is often used in parting. CM: In Spanish the word Adios means goodbye. CM: The name of the poem itself is called “Adios”, which may give the reader a clue as to what the poem is about. SD: The second thing I noticed is the line “if you are known for anything let it be for the way you rise out of sight” had to do with parting as well. CM: I think that this line means that once you are finished with your work let people see how you are going to “rise” to bigger and better things. CM: Let people remember how you rose above expectations and went farther than they ever thought possible. SD: The third and final thing I noticed how Ms. Nye says “strap it to your back like wings”, which also connects to parting. CM: “Spread your wings and fly” is a commonly used expression for sentimental moments when someone is parting. CM: It’s also interesting that she chose the word “wings” because wings are often used in parting whether it’s the wings of an angel carrying a loved one off to heaven, or the wings of a baby bird flying away from the nest. (Loose Sentence) CS: These are several good paradigms relating to parting that I found in Ms. Nye’s Poem.
TS: Ms. Dickinson’s poem was more difficult to find connections in than Ms. Nye’s poem, but I successfully made some. SD: Dickinson relates parting to heaven near the end of her poem. CM: She says “parting is all we know of heaven” meaning that all people really know about heaven is that once you part you may go to there. CM: I find it ironic that something good like heaven, can come from something perceived as sad and depressing like death. SD: Near the end Dickinson related parting to the complete opposite of heaven; hell. CM: She explains that parting is “all we need of hell” meaning that all anyone wants or needs to know about hell is that once you part you may go there. CM: Hell is obviously a bad thing that people don’t want to know about so they choose to know as little as they can. CS: Heaven and Hell are examples of a negative and positive outcome of something good like parting.
TS: An example of parting in my life is a song by one of my favorite artists, Mariah Carey. SD: The song “Bye Bye” by Mariah is sung about one of Mariah’s loved ones who has passed on. CM: She sings about how she misses that person and how much they never got to experience together. CM: Songs that are so personal like this are often my favorite because they can really relate to someone’s own experiences. SD: This song reminds me of my Grandfather Ira, who died before I really got the chance to know him seeing as he lived in California. CM: My grandfather and I really only met when I was little and about a year ago before he died, but the time that I did get to spend with him I will cherish forever. CM: Mariah sings “and you never got the chance to see how good I’ve done” which is how I feel when I think of my grandfather because there is so much about each other we didn’t know and now won’t get the chance to. SD: The lines “There’s so much more left to say. If you were with me today face to face” really speak to me because this is how I feel with my grandfather. CM: If he was still alive there would still be so much we could do together that we’ve never done. CM: We could bake, we could dance, we could sing, we could laugh, we could cry, but now I won’t get the chance to do any of that. CS: The parting of my grandfather may have been a very sad and painful experience for me, but it really made me appreciate him and all he has done more.
TS: The yin and yang, good and evil, the Red Sox and the Yankees, partings and meetings, the world always has a balance between things (Periodic Sentence). SD: Parting with things is a daily occurrence for everyone in the world and it has its pros and cons. CM: When you go home after school you are leaving your friends and teachers behind, but you’ll be able to see them the next day. CM: When a family member dies you may be grief stricken, but you know they’re going to a better place.
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Something I Like-I think i did a really good job on relating parting to each of required things in this essay.
Something I need to improve on-Again I often have a difficult time fixing and identifying small punctuation errors.
Sunday, May 3, 2009
Teddy's Essay
5/2/09
Teddy Purnell
Mr. Salsich
Room 2
Teddy Purnell
Mr. Salsich
Room 2
Dreams of Life and Kindness:
A Comparison of a Poem, a Story, and Life
My life, "Winter Dreams" by F. Scott Fitzgerald, and "Kindness" by Naomi Shihab Nye, all have either the presence, or lack of, kindness. "Winter Dreams" is lacking kindness by Dexter wanting to be with Judy, but Judy doesn’t want to be with Dexter. "Kindness", as the title implies, is about kindness, but it is also about where you can find kindness. In my life, I see kindness and the absence of kindness every day. These three things, although very different, have one thing in common; the virtue of kindness.
In my life, I see kindness on the streets, on TV, at school, everywhere. However, I also see the absence of kindness. On TV, I see people dying because of someone else’s lack of kindness and caring. If the by-standers would have shown some kindness, the death could have been prevented. At school, I see nothing except for kindness. Nobody is mean to anyone, and everyone is supportive of each other. I am glad that our school is filled with kindness, especially because I heard that other schools are actually like the schools you see on TV, with bullies and mean teachers. I see both kindness and the absence of kindness in my life, much like Naomi Shihab Nye’s poem.
In Ms. Nye’s poem, she says that to know kindness, you must also know sorrow. Ms. Nye writes, "Before you know kindness as the deepest thing inside,/ you must know sorrow as the other deepest thing." This means that you cannot fully appreciate kindness until you have experienced sorrow. Being able to contrast kindness with its opposite, sorrow, multiplies the greatness of kindness, and lets you appreciate it that much more. Ms. Nye compares sorrow to a dead "Indian in a white poncho" by the side of the road. The white poncho adds to the peacefulness and innocents of the scene. Ms. Nye was robbed before she wrote this poem, so she might have been feeling like the Indian, innocent, and hurting. Ms. Nye can appreciate kindness, but Dexter Green in "Winter Dreams" needs to appreciate kindness more.
In "Winter Dreams", Dexter Green needs to appreciate kindness more, and when he has it, he needs to hold onto it. In the beginning, Dexter Green is in love with Judy, and wants to be with her. He tries to get her, but she just won’t be with him. He then gives up and convinces himself that he’ll never have her. He needs to take the sorrow he feels now, and use it to see how much he should appreciate kindness more. He must learn that "Before [he] know[s] kindness as the deepest thing inside,/ [he] must know sorrow as the other deepest thing" like in Ms. Nye’s poem. Dexter and Judy will both benefit if Dexter learns to appreciate kindness more. If Dexter appreciates kindness more, he might appreciate Judy more when she came back to him, or he could try harder to get her in the beginning.
Kindness is everywhere, yet nowhere, depending one the perspective of the person. Some people can’t truly appreciate it, and they are blind to it. Some people have felt it, seen it, and only they can truly experience it. Are you among them?
Tuesday, April 28, 2009
Tristan's Essay!
Tristan Yerkes
Mr. Salsich
English 02
29 April 2009
Random Acts of Kindness:
An Essay Comparing Different Views on Kindness
Nowadays, you don’t see too many young men helping old ladies across the street, but kindness still exists, and I will explain its relevance in Winter Dreams by F. Scott Fitzgerald, “Kindness” by Naomi Shihab Nye, and my own life. Kindness has different meanings in each of these, and these differences themselves, are different, themselves. I will explain in this essay how the differences between these stories and my life are different.
T.S. The portraiture and thoughts of kindness in each of these pieces of literature and my life are very different, but the difference may be most profound between Winter Dreams and “Kindness”. S.D. Between these two stories, Kindness has a completely different image. C.M. The portraiture of kindness in “Kindness” is one of a gentle human characteristic hidden in the folds of emotion, whereas kindness is portrayed in Winter Dreams as a silly notion that gets Dexter into trouble in the end. In Winter Dreams, Dexter tries to be kind to Judy but gets nothing in return, whereas Judy is not at all kind, but gets all of the benefits, later, when they are older, the tables turn but the two characters take on each others roles. S.D. The thoughts about kindness helping both the giver and the recipient shown in “Kindness” are not reciprocated at all in Winter Dreams. C.M In “Kindness”, it is said that “Kindness […] ties your shoes [\..] and sends you out into the day” portraying that kindness can keep the giver running, and help out. C.M. In Winter Dreams, Dexter is the original kind person, but ends up never being with Judy, but then later when Judy tries to be kind to Dexter, the same thing happens. S.D. In “Kindness”, Nye says that kindness is something that must be learned through experience, but Winter Dreams shows kindness as something that is only motivated by want. C.M. In “Kindness”, Nye says that you must, “Travel where the Indian […] lies dead by the side of the road. [\..] You must see how this could be you.” C.M. In Winter Dreams Dexter only is kind to Judy because of his love, or want for her, and Judy is only ever kind to Dexter because of her want for his money, and forgiveness. C.S. In both of these, you can look at kindness in a different way, but these two stories take that to the maximum, and express both extremes.
T.S. The extremes between “Kindness” and Winter Dreams is great, but similar differences are seen between “Kindness” and my own life experiences. S.D. “Kindness” once again portrays ideals of kindness as sort of a mysterious human emotion that has to be coaxed out, but my life experiences have taught me differently. C.M. So far in my life, I have seen many instances of kindness, but most of them, the ones that aren‘t really kindness, have been clearly purely for the giver’s self-satisfaction. C.M. in “Kindness”, true kindness is portrayed as being only for the benefit of others, similar to my life experience. S.D. Nye shows kindness as something that must be learned through experience, but my life has taught otherwise. C.M. I have learned that those who are only kind to better their own reputation are not really kind, and so premeditated kindness such as that in “Kindness” is not actually real. C.M. Those who are spontaneous about their kindness do it, not from the heart, not because they thought about it, but because that is just what they do. S.D. The kindness in “Kindness” at one point keeps the giver running, but experience from my life has taught me that this is not true kindness. C.M. In my life, I have learned that those who use kindness as a sort of throne to sit upon, and feel smug are not actually being kind, but rather just trying to make themselves better. C.M. This sort of kindness is shown in “Kindness”, keeping the giver running, and happy about themselves. Kindness takes different forms, and my views show one, opposing view over those of Ms. Nye’s poem.
T.S. My views on “Kindness” may oppose Ms. Nye’s views strongly, but I think that there is no real kindness portrayed in Winter Dreams. S.D. The “kindness” shown in Winter Dreams is just Dexter trying to make himself happy. C.M. It may seem condescending (FAST WORD)to say that Dexter was just trying to help himself by being kind, but the only reasons behind Dexter being kind to Judy were selfish. C.M. Dexter loved Judy in such a way that it was almost an obsession; when Judy was happy, Dexter was happy, so Dexter sought to make Judy happy, not for her gain, but for his own. (LOOSE SENTENCE) S.D. Judy was also “kind” to Dexter near the end of the story, saying she wanted to be with him after all. C.M. Judy was just being a HEDONIST (FAST WORD) when she offered to take Dexter back, she only wanted personal gain. C.M. Judy was in a low state at that point in the book, older, less attractive, and wasting away with people she didn’t love, so when she saw that Dexter could give her a new life, she pretended to be kind to him just so that he would take her in and give her things. (LOOSE SENTENCE) S.D. The “kindness” between the two characters, Judy and Dexter is really just an intertwined battle for each to make themselves happier. C.M. Dexter just battered Judy with pleasures so that he could gain his own ephemeral (FAST WORD) winter dreams, his own pleasure. C.M. Judy, becoming less of the celebrity she was, (APPOSITIVE) needed to restart her own life, so she resorted to being kind to Dexter so he would save her from her life. C.S. The actions of Judy and Dexter may have seemed kind, but they were selfish, they were desperate, they were fake, and they were not kindness. (TETRACOLON CLIMAX)
The versions of kindness were very complex in each of these views, and so the comparisons were rich. Whether it is helping an old lady across the street, or acting kind to someone so that you can feel good yourself, kindness takes many forms. These random acts of kindness have strange, and different reasoning behind them.
Mr. Salsich
English 02
29 April 2009
Random Acts of Kindness:
An Essay Comparing Different Views on Kindness
Nowadays, you don’t see too many young men helping old ladies across the street, but kindness still exists, and I will explain its relevance in Winter Dreams by F. Scott Fitzgerald, “Kindness” by Naomi Shihab Nye, and my own life. Kindness has different meanings in each of these, and these differences themselves, are different, themselves. I will explain in this essay how the differences between these stories and my life are different.
T.S. The portraiture and thoughts of kindness in each of these pieces of literature and my life are very different, but the difference may be most profound between Winter Dreams and “Kindness”. S.D. Between these two stories, Kindness has a completely different image. C.M. The portraiture of kindness in “Kindness” is one of a gentle human characteristic hidden in the folds of emotion, whereas kindness is portrayed in Winter Dreams as a silly notion that gets Dexter into trouble in the end. In Winter Dreams, Dexter tries to be kind to Judy but gets nothing in return, whereas Judy is not at all kind, but gets all of the benefits, later, when they are older, the tables turn but the two characters take on each others roles. S.D. The thoughts about kindness helping both the giver and the recipient shown in “Kindness” are not reciprocated at all in Winter Dreams. C.M In “Kindness”, it is said that “Kindness […] ties your shoes [\..] and sends you out into the day” portraying that kindness can keep the giver running, and help out. C.M. In Winter Dreams, Dexter is the original kind person, but ends up never being with Judy, but then later when Judy tries to be kind to Dexter, the same thing happens. S.D. In “Kindness”, Nye says that kindness is something that must be learned through experience, but Winter Dreams shows kindness as something that is only motivated by want. C.M. In “Kindness”, Nye says that you must, “Travel where the Indian […] lies dead by the side of the road. [\..] You must see how this could be you.” C.M. In Winter Dreams Dexter only is kind to Judy because of his love, or want for her, and Judy is only ever kind to Dexter because of her want for his money, and forgiveness. C.S. In both of these, you can look at kindness in a different way, but these two stories take that to the maximum, and express both extremes.
T.S. The extremes between “Kindness” and Winter Dreams is great, but similar differences are seen between “Kindness” and my own life experiences. S.D. “Kindness” once again portrays ideals of kindness as sort of a mysterious human emotion that has to be coaxed out, but my life experiences have taught me differently. C.M. So far in my life, I have seen many instances of kindness, but most of them, the ones that aren‘t really kindness, have been clearly purely for the giver’s self-satisfaction. C.M. in “Kindness”, true kindness is portrayed as being only for the benefit of others, similar to my life experience. S.D. Nye shows kindness as something that must be learned through experience, but my life has taught otherwise. C.M. I have learned that those who are only kind to better their own reputation are not really kind, and so premeditated kindness such as that in “Kindness” is not actually real. C.M. Those who are spontaneous about their kindness do it, not from the heart, not because they thought about it, but because that is just what they do. S.D. The kindness in “Kindness” at one point keeps the giver running, but experience from my life has taught me that this is not true kindness. C.M. In my life, I have learned that those who use kindness as a sort of throne to sit upon, and feel smug are not actually being kind, but rather just trying to make themselves better. C.M. This sort of kindness is shown in “Kindness”, keeping the giver running, and happy about themselves. Kindness takes different forms, and my views show one, opposing view over those of Ms. Nye’s poem.
T.S. My views on “Kindness” may oppose Ms. Nye’s views strongly, but I think that there is no real kindness portrayed in Winter Dreams. S.D. The “kindness” shown in Winter Dreams is just Dexter trying to make himself happy. C.M. It may seem condescending (FAST WORD)to say that Dexter was just trying to help himself by being kind, but the only reasons behind Dexter being kind to Judy were selfish. C.M. Dexter loved Judy in such a way that it was almost an obsession; when Judy was happy, Dexter was happy, so Dexter sought to make Judy happy, not for her gain, but for his own. (LOOSE SENTENCE) S.D. Judy was also “kind” to Dexter near the end of the story, saying she wanted to be with him after all. C.M. Judy was just being a HEDONIST (FAST WORD) when she offered to take Dexter back, she only wanted personal gain. C.M. Judy was in a low state at that point in the book, older, less attractive, and wasting away with people she didn’t love, so when she saw that Dexter could give her a new life, she pretended to be kind to him just so that he would take her in and give her things. (LOOSE SENTENCE) S.D. The “kindness” between the two characters, Judy and Dexter is really just an intertwined battle for each to make themselves happier. C.M. Dexter just battered Judy with pleasures so that he could gain his own ephemeral (FAST WORD) winter dreams, his own pleasure. C.M. Judy, becoming less of the celebrity she was, (APPOSITIVE) needed to restart her own life, so she resorted to being kind to Dexter so he would save her from her life. C.S. The actions of Judy and Dexter may have seemed kind, but they were selfish, they were desperate, they were fake, and they were not kindness. (TETRACOLON CLIMAX)
The versions of kindness were very complex in each of these views, and so the comparisons were rich. Whether it is helping an old lady across the street, or acting kind to someone so that you can feel good yourself, kindness takes many forms. These random acts of kindness have strange, and different reasoning behind them.
Monday, April 27, 2009
Ty's essay
Ty LeVarge
Mr. Salsich
English 02
April 28, 2009
Kindness:
An essay on how two tales compare to my life and to each other
Kindness has many forms to resemble many different types of feelings. Love, joy, and happiness are all common forms of kindness. These are different emotions that are centered on someone enjoying being kind.
Kindness is a general topic that has many sources that are similar to it.
In the short story “Winter Dreams”, Dexter Green experiences love which is a heavy and sensitive type of happiness. Love is a very powerful type of happiness and has much power that is not to be tainted with. If you were to keep your love strong, then your life will become a huge miracle for you. If you do not take love seriously, it will betray you and make your life miserable. Dexter Loved Judy and Judy loved Dexter and one decision changed Dexter’s life forever. Judy ruined Dexter’s life by leaving him for another man. This shows that Judy can devastate Dexter’s life by making one decision for her own needs. Love is powerful and can be an advantage or an apocalypse of your life.
In the poem Kindness, by Naomi Shihab Nye, different types of happiness occur within the focus of the poem. For Ms. Nye, she thinks of kindness as another form of happiness. To give someone a gift is kindness is giving the person you are being kind to a great deal of happiness. You also have a great deal of happiness whenever you give kindness. She also suggests that a fantasy is another form of being happy. Being in a fantasy is an endless source of happiness and solitude. Being in a fantasy is like being in a dream and is the best place for someone that loves to be alone and in their own safe place. A fantasy is a safe haven for someone and kindness is a generosity that is a gift.
In my life, I have many forms of happiness and I have some that are similar to these stories. I have a small fantasy that helps me to live happy and peaceful. Video games allow me to stray away from reality and allow me to unleash stress and escape the outside world. I can just fade from reality and be happy for the entire day to achieve great happiness. I also am happy through kindness. I have given much of my time and devotion to the community and people that I know. Kindness made me happy to be giving back and that kindness is a huge part of my happiness. I have similar opinions of happiness as poems and it is very interesting.
Happiness is easy to obtain but is very valuable. If happiness was to be lost then everyone’s life turns to become miserable. If one individual is miserable then the day of many are affected. Happiness is an essential part of an individual’s everyday life.
Mr. Salsich
English 02
April 28, 2009
Kindness:
An essay on how two tales compare to my life and to each other
Kindness has many forms to resemble many different types of feelings. Love, joy, and happiness are all common forms of kindness. These are different emotions that are centered on someone enjoying being kind.
Kindness is a general topic that has many sources that are similar to it.
In the short story “Winter Dreams”, Dexter Green experiences love which is a heavy and sensitive type of happiness. Love is a very powerful type of happiness and has much power that is not to be tainted with. If you were to keep your love strong, then your life will become a huge miracle for you. If you do not take love seriously, it will betray you and make your life miserable. Dexter Loved Judy and Judy loved Dexter and one decision changed Dexter’s life forever. Judy ruined Dexter’s life by leaving him for another man. This shows that Judy can devastate Dexter’s life by making one decision for her own needs. Love is powerful and can be an advantage or an apocalypse of your life.
In the poem Kindness, by Naomi Shihab Nye, different types of happiness occur within the focus of the poem. For Ms. Nye, she thinks of kindness as another form of happiness. To give someone a gift is kindness is giving the person you are being kind to a great deal of happiness. You also have a great deal of happiness whenever you give kindness. She also suggests that a fantasy is another form of being happy. Being in a fantasy is an endless source of happiness and solitude. Being in a fantasy is like being in a dream and is the best place for someone that loves to be alone and in their own safe place. A fantasy is a safe haven for someone and kindness is a generosity that is a gift.
In my life, I have many forms of happiness and I have some that are similar to these stories. I have a small fantasy that helps me to live happy and peaceful. Video games allow me to stray away from reality and allow me to unleash stress and escape the outside world. I can just fade from reality and be happy for the entire day to achieve great happiness. I also am happy through kindness. I have given much of my time and devotion to the community and people that I know. Kindness made me happy to be giving back and that kindness is a huge part of my happiness. I have similar opinions of happiness as poems and it is very interesting.
Happiness is easy to obtain but is very valuable. If happiness was to be lost then everyone’s life turns to become miserable. If one individual is miserable then the day of many are affected. Happiness is an essential part of an individual’s everyday life.
Kyle's Essay
Kyle Sebastian
Professor H. Salsich
English 9
28 April 2009
Whats Is This Feeling:
An Essay on Kindness.
TS: Kindness is a common human trait that many people use. SD: Sometimes to understand what kindness is people have to understand other things. CM: Sometimes you have to feel sorrow before you can feel happiness. CM: Sometimes you have to lose something to gain something as well.
TS: Naomi Shihab Nye tries to explain that before one can understand kindness they have to understand other things. SD: What Nye knows and many people need to understand is that loss is essential for gain. CM: To gain something you nearly always have to sacrifice something in return. CM: Sometimes losing things can hurt, but the end result of you losing them can be a kindness that life has dealt you. SD: Another thing Nye understands is that life is different for everyone. CM: Sometimes you have to step into someone else’s shoes and look at life from a different point of view. CM: Maybe you should try and think about how “the Indian in a white poncho” sees things. CM: You do other people a kindness by taking the time to see through their eyes and get their perspective. SD: The last thing that Nye says is essential to obtaining kindness is to know sorrow first. CM: Sometimes to truly appreciate the good things in life we must experience the bad. CM: At times you have to do things you don’t like, but in the end things may end up being in favor for you. CS: Once you understand these other things you can find kindness.
TS: “Winter Dreams” may seem to have no connection with “Kindness”, but Dexter, an ostentatious young man, is actually the perfect example of how to obtain kindness (Appositive). SD: Dexter had to lose something to gain something. CM: He had lost Judy, the woman seeming to consume his heart, body, mind and spirit (Tetracolon climax). CM: Dexter says "Now that thing is gone, that thing is gone. I cannot cry. I cannot care. That thing will come back no more." He has lost Judy, but has gained a sound mind and is able to think clearly again. SD: Dexter also had the chance to see through someone else’s eyes. CM: He was treated like the many other suitors Judy had and wasn’t taken seriously by Judy. CM: He got a glimpse at what the other men under Judy’s charm felt like, he wore his heart out on his sleeve and in turn Judy had crushed it when it was vulnerable (Loose Sentence?). SD: Dexter also had to feel sorrow before he could find kindness. CM: When the man described what Judy had become Dexter was stricken with an overwhelming amount of sorrow; his “sun [had] gone down.” CM: Dexter may not notice it, but the man did him a kindness because he could then move on with his life and forget about Judy. CS: After close examination “Winter Dreams” really had more connections to “Kindness” than I thought.
TS: I have experienced many of the things Ms. Nye mentions in her poem “Kindness.” SD: I’ve had to lose something to get something in return many times in my life. CM: There are many insignificant situations that I’ve had to let something go, but ended up getting something better in return. CM: An example is when I had to spend my allowance to get my brother something for his birthday at first I was angry and upset with him, but after I realized that his happiness was worth more than some printed paper. CM: Important things, like a loved one or a prized possession, haven’t slipped from my grasp very much and I am thankful that I am that fortunate. SD: I also have to frequently step into somebody else’s shoes and look at a situation from their point of view. CM: Often friends come to me complaining about another person and I usually try and imagine myself as the other person and explain to my friends what that other person may be feeling like. CM: This is a great kindness to the people whose feelings you are trying to understand, but it also is a good thing for people to learn because it teaches consideration. SD: Lastly I have felt adversity many times before I was given kindness. CM: Usually what tempts people to be kind to someone is because the other person is in a sorrowful state and they want to cheer them up. CM: When I feel depressed I am often supported by my family and friends who try to be as benevolent as they can. CS: My life and many other people’s lives have been expressed in a simple poem by a simple woman.
TS: Kindness is a universal technique that helps you communicate to others in a positive way. SD: There are many different ways you can express kindness to another person; it can be something small, like saying hello with a smile or something big, like supporting someone in a time of crisis (Loose Sentence ?). CM: Whether it’s giving something away, cheering someone up, or looking through another person’s perspective kindness can be expressed easily. CM: However the best part about kindness, is that it always comes back to you.
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Bold-FAST Words
Monday, April 20, 2009
Kyle's Essay
The Women of Sentimentalism:
An Essay on Three Pieces of Literature and how they connect to the Word Sentimental
TS: “The world is neither wise nor just, but it takes up for its folly and injustice by being damnably sentimental.” (Thomas Henry Huxley) SD: Sentimentalism is used by everyone in the world at one point. CM: Ms. Dickinson, Ms. Nye, and Laura all show signs of being sentimental. CM: They each show sentimentalism towards something; Dickinson towards her poems, Nye towards the small things in life, and Laura towards people in general.
TS: The whole tone of the poem “The Traveling Onion” is sentimental towards onions, which Nye uses as a metaphor to the small things in life. SD: Naomi Shihab Nye uses an excess of sentiment towards the onion. CM: She says that she could “kneel and praise” such an insignificant thing. CM: She says that when an onion is cut into “a history [is] revealed”, which is ridiculous of course, but shows her adulation of the onion. SD: She also perhaps thinks too deeply about the onion. CM: In the second stanza she explains how we never appreciate the onion for what it truly is; something "small and forgotten". CM: An example of this is when she says “at meal, we sit to eat / . . . , commenting on texture of meat [. . .] but never on the translucence of onion.” CM: Its very surprising that even a poet could have so much to say about something so little.
TS: Ms. Nye and Laura, a character from “The Garden Party”, think alike because they both tend to exaggerate about things. SD: Laura had the best of intentions at heart, but she went overboard when she concerned herself with the family of a dead man. CM: She praised him as if he was much more than a carcass that was waiting to rot. CM: She even refers to him as “wonderful” and “beautiful” and even calls him a “marvel.” SD: Laura, being the kind soul she is, got so worked up after seeing his body she had come out crying, yet happier than ever. CM: One would think that seeing a dead man’s body would be a traumatic experience. CM: Even when her brother, Laurie, asks “Was it awful?” she answers “No [. . .] it was marvelous.” CS: Being kind and caring is always nice, but there is an ad nauseum for everything and Laura’s prying into somebody else’s affairs got to be very querulous.
TS: Laura was too susceptible and Emily Dickinson seems to show no sensibility at all in her poem “I’m Nobody”. SD: Ms. Dickinson, being known for her often confusing and obscure writings, used little visible sensibility in many of her poems. CM: The readers of her poems often don’t have the faintest clue what she is writing about. CM: However, in lines such as “how public like a frog to tell your name [. . .] to an admiring bog” one has to really pay close attention to make a connection. CM: Maybe the connection is between a “frog” and yourself and an “admiring bog” and meddlesome people. SD: One of the dictionary definitions of “sensibility” is the “awareness of and responsiveness toward something” so maybe she had ulterior motives for making her poems so abnormal. CM: Maybe Ms. Dickinson did have a hidden point behind her poems, but she wanted her readers to use their sensibility to uncover it. CM: However, maybe she simply wrote what came to her mind and didn’t intend for it to have any meaning at all. CS: Sometimes the most beautiful things in life are the simple things and maybe this is what Ms. Dickinson was trying to tell people through her poetry.
TS: Most people are naturally born with a sense of sentimentalism and are led by their emotions. SD: People base what they do on their sentimentalism. CM: Laura’s sensibility led her to care about the feelings of other. CM: Even Ms. Nye’s sentimentalism has led her to care about the small things in life.
Key
Purple-S-V Split
Blue-Appositive
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An Essay on Three Pieces of Literature and how they connect to the Word Sentimental
TS: “The world is neither wise nor just, but it takes up for its folly and injustice by being damnably sentimental.” (Thomas Henry Huxley) SD: Sentimentalism is used by everyone in the world at one point. CM: Ms. Dickinson, Ms. Nye, and Laura all show signs of being sentimental. CM: They each show sentimentalism towards something; Dickinson towards her poems, Nye towards the small things in life, and Laura towards people in general.
TS: The whole tone of the poem “The Traveling Onion” is sentimental towards onions, which Nye uses as a metaphor to the small things in life. SD: Naomi Shihab Nye uses an excess of sentiment towards the onion. CM: She says that she could “kneel and praise” such an insignificant thing. CM: She says that when an onion is cut into “a history [is] revealed”, which is ridiculous of course, but shows her adulation of the onion. SD: She also perhaps thinks too deeply about the onion. CM: In the second stanza she explains how we never appreciate the onion for what it truly is; something "small and forgotten". CM: An example of this is when she says “at meal, we sit to eat / . . . , commenting on texture of meat [. . .] but never on the translucence of onion.” CM: Its very surprising that even a poet could have so much to say about something so little.
TS: Ms. Nye and Laura, a character from “The Garden Party”, think alike because they both tend to exaggerate about things. SD: Laura had the best of intentions at heart, but she went overboard when she concerned herself with the family of a dead man. CM: She praised him as if he was much more than a carcass that was waiting to rot. CM: She even refers to him as “wonderful” and “beautiful” and even calls him a “marvel.” SD: Laura, being the kind soul she is, got so worked up after seeing his body she had come out crying, yet happier than ever. CM: One would think that seeing a dead man’s body would be a traumatic experience. CM: Even when her brother, Laurie, asks “Was it awful?” she answers “No [. . .] it was marvelous.” CS: Being kind and caring is always nice, but there is an ad nauseum for everything and Laura’s prying into somebody else’s affairs got to be very querulous.
TS: Laura was too susceptible and Emily Dickinson seems to show no sensibility at all in her poem “I’m Nobody”. SD: Ms. Dickinson, being known for her often confusing and obscure writings, used little visible sensibility in many of her poems. CM: The readers of her poems often don’t have the faintest clue what she is writing about. CM: However, in lines such as “how public like a frog to tell your name [. . .] to an admiring bog” one has to really pay close attention to make a connection. CM: Maybe the connection is between a “frog” and yourself and an “admiring bog” and meddlesome people. SD: One of the dictionary definitions of “sensibility” is the “awareness of and responsiveness toward something” so maybe she had ulterior motives for making her poems so abnormal. CM: Maybe Ms. Dickinson did have a hidden point behind her poems, but she wanted her readers to use their sensibility to uncover it. CM: However, maybe she simply wrote what came to her mind and didn’t intend for it to have any meaning at all. CS: Sometimes the most beautiful things in life are the simple things and maybe this is what Ms. Dickinson was trying to tell people through her poetry.
TS: Most people are naturally born with a sense of sentimentalism and are led by their emotions. SD: People base what they do on their sentimentalism. CM: Laura’s sensibility led her to care about the feelings of other. CM: Even Ms. Nye’s sentimentalism has led her to care about the small things in life.
Key
Purple-S-V Split
Blue-Appositive
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